So this weekend I sat in on a panel discussion by a best selling author and she was giving some tips about writing a book. One of the points she brought up was that most people decide if they will continue with a book in the first paragraph or page at most. So the question becomes if you read this, does it draw you in?
As the elevator began to ascend, Gerald studied his reflection in the door. "When did I become a cliche?" he wondered, "Old, grey beard, pony tail and a bit too overweight for my own good. Heading to a job interview for a Linux administrator position." He let out a long sigh, "I just can not take another; synergistic, cheese moving, Come to Jesus, give us 110% while we sit back and decide who we are going to keep, post acquisition, cluster fuck of a meeting! I have two kids in college, a mortgage, debts, depression, anxiety and anger issues; now here I am in an elevator needing to be calm and positive but failing miserably!" The sudden stop of the elevator brought Gerald out of his thoughts, he tried to compose himself as he stepped towards the opening doors.
Do you want to know more about Gerald? Are you interested in what awaits him once he steps off of the elevator?
I agree, this will be a long process for me.
Needs a little, tiny something that makes you want to run into the next paragraph. I like the first paragraph, it is well written but it needs a tease.